WARNING!!!!!!!!! not a spyro the dragon fan storie fan? than DO NOT READ!!!!!!!!
this is the storie of my new dragon charactor, i used the rong name. i dident think to name him sphinx untill yesterday, so sorry... in this storie, his name is serg
As i woke up from a nap under a tree, i found my self in a cold sweat. it was dark out and i forgot where i was and why i was thare. after a few miniuts i remberd, i was in a deep forest. about a week ago, a mysterious creature in a hooded trench coat came to me in the middle of the night. he tolde me to "head west, i would know when i get to where i was going" i asked "what do you mean? i dont understand" he asked me "you ARE the one thay call serg? the one who can controll the darkness?" "yeah, but why is any of my personal life your busniss?" he got really close to my face and talked in a low voice "you are serg, the fox, the one who can controll the darkness?" i sighed "yes" his mouth and eyes glowed red, i could see him smiling at me "i know all about you, i know who put you in that block of solid amber, if you dont do what i tell you, you worth less flea bitten shit, ill have them put you back. and non of your powrs can stop me or him, so dont waist your energy. do what i say" than he grabed me by the neck and held me to a tree. when i was relesed, thare was some kind of a mettel colar around my neck. i fell to the ground. he steped on my chest and and leadne to tell me "the shock from that metteal band on your neck could kill a full grown rino. because of who you are, it will just weaken you." he got up and turned away.
i sat up and looked around for things from the storys i had heard. i heard that thayere was a city of dragons and a few villages of mixed species. id heard that the dragons would kill, compleetly unprevoked. i dident believe the stories because my mothers mother is a dragon, which not only ment i was very powerfull, but she was also the one who raised me. my mother was killed in a battle agenst a tribe of wove people who surrounded her and and killed her by stabbing her 74 times. my father was eaten by the dark loard's monster, a demon-dragon mix. she raised me as one or her own. it felt werd because she was still young [in dragon yeras] i age in dragon years also but she is small. infact i can pick her up, but only if i need to. i havent seen her in several years, i think. iv ben stuck in a chunk of solid amber. its ben three and a half days since iv ben freed. i got stuck because i went into a cave chasing the wolf that killed my mother and the ground exploded and thats all i rember. as i continued west i realized how late it was so i stoped close to a village and went to sleer under a tree. when i woke up i thought i was dreaming, i was moveing. than i looked to my sides and saw that i was tied a long log being cerried by a dog, a fox a wolf and a lepard. i was tired, i yawned wide. i fell back asleep and when i woke up again, i was stairing out at a village of wolves and dogs, the village looked nervious. i was stuck to a poll by a electric chain. some collie persom came up to me, she had a dagger in one hadd by her side. ahe spoke to me like i was retarted "YOU...HAVE...BEN...CEPTURED...DO...YOU...UNDERSTAND?" i looked at her like she had 20 heads "what? why are you talking to me like that?" she griped the dagger harder "good you speak english" she turned and started to walk away ans shouted "everyone keep your distance, hes awake" the leader of the village, a large lepard named spiret, approached me. he looked at me and smiled "serg, right?" "who wants to know?" "the person who could end your life" i held bck a laugh "pfff..." "are you the one thay speek of in the stories? the one with the powers?" "yeah, why is that important to you?" he dident answer, he asked "were you sent by your master? to destroy us as you did with those other villages?" "i dont work for him and more, i dont feel it right to mindlessly kill inocents in my eyes and..." "yeah right, the stories tell tthat you have no sole and if enraged to a point can enilate an entier city if commanded by your master" "no...." i started to get louder "thats not me any more!" he stood up and walked away than he shouted to the eager crowd "if you feel he deserves somthing for somthing he's done to you or your family, have at him!" my eyes widened at the site of a large crowd of people runing at me, the chain fell off of my neck. i ran as fast as i could. i found my self runing into a village. i heard one of the presuing crowd say"let him go, hes as good as dead in thare anyway" i was in a small village of dragon worriers and younger dragons of the worriers familys. i kept looking around me, young dragons ran around as i felt somthing strike the back of my head, hard. like a bulding fell on me and i was knocked out. it was day break of the next morning when i woke up. i was in the lair of the dragons village shawman. he was about 9 feet tall, pearl silver, with greanish silvery eyes and large wings. when he came out, he was smiling. "iv been anticipating meeting you, young serg" he came up and sat next to me. "i know more about you than you know, not from stories, but from 'reading your mind' you might say. i know what your capable of and what you truly are serg... would you like to see?" i looked at him with disbeliefe "come now, its really quite intresting, young brutis, it will relese more power than you could possably immagin!" i stood up "ok, show me" "ok but you do realize, once i show you, you cant go back..." i had no idea what he ment "ok" "come to me" i got up and went to where he was siting... thare was a moment of nothingness. then thair was a bright light and a pain that made me pass out. when i woke up next, my body felt heavy as i lied on the cold hard ground so i dident move. the shawman came to my side and smiled "aaah.... young serg, you stir. have you slept well?" "umm, yeah, i guse so. what did you do to me, i feel so heavy" "get up and look at your reflection in the water... you can do it" i struggled, keeping my eyes pinned on his, i dident break contact. i fell down. he laughed "hold on, let me get somthing" he went and got a big merrior. "are you ready for this?" he asked "....i guse so, as ready as im gona get" he showed me my reflection and i freaked out. i saw a small black dragon stairing back at me "Aaah!" i tryed to get up again but fell down "what did you do?" "exactaly what i said" he wached my for a miniut "try geting up on all fours" i tryed standing aon four legs and i dident fall down "see now? isnt that better?" i walked around, i felt funny "serg, when you were borne, you were a dragon, butyou were turned into a fox by a magic man because your parents were foxes. now you see your true form" he told me as i walked around and looked at my self. i was now a dark dragon with deep green eyes and some kind of mettal hornes, i couldent believe it. i looked at my red chest and large wings in dissbelief. "i see you are ither pleased or shoked with your appearence" "i....i....wow" "do you know how to controll your tail?" he put a steel vase infront of me "i want you to touch this with your tail" i whiped my tail around and it put a hole stright through the mettal, my tail was tipped with the same mettal as my hornes "wow! did i just do that?" "yes, and becarfull whith your tail, you could hurt someone your not trying to hurt" i ran around a bit, amazed at how strong i felt. "can you fly?" "i dont know" "well try, its easy" i closed my eyes and tryed to fly, i was amazed when i opened my eyes to see i was not touchinbg the ground! "very good serg! but can you use and breath powers?" i landed and sat down "i dont know what i can do" "just think sbout somthing and breath out" i inhaled andthought aboul those wolves... when i exhaled a red light came from my mouth and blew a huge hole in the shawmans wall "oh man! im so sorry!" "its ok serg. try it again but think of somthins els" i breathed in again and thought of being stuck in that amber, when i exhaled, a green explosion came out, it was poision! "wow..." "very nice. now try runing towards that wall and think of the first thing you thought of" i ran towards the wall and thought of the wolves and turned into a flying black glowing ball that blew the wall out. than i walked back to the shawman "wow, did i just do that?..." "yes, it appears you are a very fast learner" i sat down "i feel you are now ready to go out in to the world, but first..." he tryed to remove the mettal band that was still around my neck "humm... it seems the band can not be reomved.... take care of your self serg" "i will, and thank you..." i walked back into the forest, a dragon. i continued to head west, i knew that wasent what that thing ment by 'you'll know when you get thair' where ever it was, i wasent thare. i stoped to dring from a spring. as i drank, a cheeta came up behind me and utterd in a deep voice "i knew you would return..." i turned to look at him "iv never met you" "yes, you do know me im..." "you must have me confused with another dragon buddy" "now that you mention it, your voice is very diffrent, and you do look a bit diffrent" i started to walk away when he said "watch your self..." i shook my head as i walked away. i walked along a large bush that went on for miles and was atleast 15 feet tall. i heard voices comeing from the other side, i couldent tell what thay were saying, but thay were walking in the same direction i was. i saw a break in the bush about a mile up the bush. i compleetly forgot about the voices. when i reached the break in the bush, i looked through it and thought it was a merrior. i stoped and walked half way trough the cut. i saw another dragon behind the dragon i was looking at. i looked back because i thgought i was looking into a merror untill i reached out and tryed to touch the merror and it hit me for it. i shook it off "hay!" the dragon i was looking at was a girl, she said "you hit me first so dont complain" the other dragon came up to where we were and said "who are you?" i looked at him funny "who wants to know?" he laughed a little bit "dont worry, i dont want to hurt you, i just wanted to know your name" i shiged "my name is serg, whats yalls?" the femail said "i think iv heard of you..." be for she could finish, i said "those stories arnt true!" she smiled at me "its ok, even if thay are, it dosent matter" than we all sat down at the same time. the male said "well, im spyro, and this is cynder" "well its nice to meet both of you" than cynder said "so non of the stories are true?" "well... to tell you the truth, most of them are true... im not proud to say. i think iv heard of you two though." she said back is the stuck in amber storie true?" "yea, it is. that one i have no problem telling" spyro said "dident you usto work under some evil over loard?" "yes... but i was paying off a debt. he spaired my life, but for a price..." "and you dont work for him anymore?" "nope, i stoped and realized 'these people havent done anything to ME or anyone i know, why kill them' and quit. but he got pissed and is still trying to kill me" i looked at cynder "i think....i thinksome one confused me with you" she looked back "what?" "some cheeta guy came up and said to me 'i knew you would return' but got a better look at me and saw i wasent the person he was thinking of" spyro said "he might have... so where are you heading?" "west, thats all i know. i was told to head west" spyro thought for a miniut "traveling with anyone?" i sighed deeply "no... all my friends and family are dead..." spyro looked at cynder than thay both looked at me than back at each other and spyro asked "would you like to travel with us?" i sat and thunk for a moment "ok, that sounds great" just than sparks came over breathing heavy "i..... you two......cought...." than he took a breath "sorry guys, we got a little separated thare" spyro smiled "its ok sparx" i layed down and curled in to a ball. spyro and cynder layed down close to me, it was cold, we were trying to stay warm. we ended up on top of one another and turned into a pile of dragons as we drifted off to sleep. when i woke up, it was daybreak. thare was doo on all of the plants and the sun hadent even peeked over the mountians. i was the first one up. i went to get a drink from the river, it was cold out so the water was freezing cold. when i got back, cynder was geting up. i sat down and wached her. "good morning" i was drifting and it took a second but i jumped "wha? who? oh, good morning" i just thought to my self 'smoooooth' she smiled, trying to hold back laughing. than she looked at spyro, still still sleeping. "we should probably wake him up" i looked at her, than at him "ok"we walked over to him and started nudgeing him and screaming but he wouldent wake up "is he always this hard to wake up?" i asked "yep" i looked around for somthing... i saw an old bucket. i looked at cynder, she saw it too "i got an idea" and i went and got the bucket, i brought it back to her. she looked at it and looked back at me. "ok, lets try it" i went and filled it with water. with the bucket handel in my mouth, i stood over spyro and tilted it with my tail. spyro jumped in to the air "aaah!" and landed on his side. cynder stood next to him "finaly, do you even know how hard it is to wake you up?" he stood up "humm, what? oh, yeah. sorry" i looked at the sky, thare were dark clouds i looked at sparx, he was siting on spyro. "we should start moving, thares a storm comeing" thay both looked up and spyro said "your right" and sparx said "geez, i hate rain" cynder smiled "its just rain" as we started walking, we heard thunder and it was geting darker. it started to rain and we found a small cave to wait out the rain. we all huddeld together because we were cold, wet and pissed. when the rain stoped, we went out and started to walk again. about an houer after we started walking, we stoped "did you guys hear that?" cynder asked us. i looked at her confused. "i dident hear nothin, you spyro?" he looked around "nothin". we all took flight and started to look around... in the distance thare was a fire."come on you guys!" cynder shouted as she started towards it. we followed her. when we got close we landed and saw that thare were 7 or 8 or the dark loards minions poking in to a cage, in side the cage was a small dragon. about 4 feet tall, with purple tiped feathers and angel styled wings. thaw were poking it with spears and laughing. i looked at spyro and cynder "i think i know that dragon, we gota help" spyro looked at cynder "hes right" she smiled "lets go" we charged in to thair camp. i grabed one of them with my tail and threw him at another than stabed them with my tail. spyro threw three guys into theair and beat them in mid air than hit them into the into the river next to the camp, thay all drowned and cynder stabed the last two with her tail and flung them into the distance. i went and cut the lock with the sharp mettal blade at the end of my tail. "zoe?" the small dragon looked at me "do i know you? i smiled and opend the cage "yes, you do" shi looked into my eyes for a miniut "....serg?....serg? is that you?!" i smiled and nuzzeld the side of hir face "yea, its me" shi huged me "i thought you were dead, we all did" the four of us sat by the fire and relaxed, zoe sat between my front legs, huging me she looked up at cynder and spyro, than whisperd to me "umm.... who are thay?" thay both moved closer to me and zoe. "this is spyro and cynder" cynder looked at me "so, how do you know her?" i smiled at her "shi is a hermaphrodite, and iv known hir for a long time" spyro looked at me and at zoe. i looked at the fire and told zoe "thayere some friends of mine, thair cool, thay wont hurt you." the three of us were huddeld together and zoe stood infront of cynder and spyro. spyro lowerd his head some and smiled at hir. "its nice to meet you" shi playfully huged his neck "hi"he started laughing when zoe jumped on cynder when she wasent looking and she fell down. zoe sat on cynders stomac and i started laughing "hahaha! looks like she likes you two" zoe fell asleep on her. me and spyro layed close to cynder and i smiled "sorry, shi dose things like that all the time" she looked up at me "its ok" spyro rested his head on cynder and i curled up next to the fire a bit away from zoe spyro and cynder. i fell asleep and had a dream. i was reliving the day mo mother got killed. i got half way through the act of hatred when i felt some one hiting my side and i heard "serg?.... wake up!..... serg!" i blinked and opend my eyes. it was dark, and spyro was hiting my side to wake me up. i jumped "wha?" he looked at me "you ok?" i looked around, zoe was cuddeld on ceyner and thay were both asleep. i sighed and looked up at spyro "thank you" i lowerd my head a little "are you ok?" "no, i just re lived that day my mother died...." he lowerd his head a little "oh...." i looked at him "thank you, you woke me up befor the bad part" he got a little closer to me "its not your fault. you cant change it, your still hear and im shure she wouldent want you to beat your self up over it" i smiled a small sad smile "you know, your right... thank you..." he smiled "you gona be ok?" he said laying his head on cynder "yeah...ill be ok" i curled up close to him, cynder and zoe. in the morning, i woke up and spyro was already awake. "hi serg". i stook up and streached "hay." "sleep well?" "yeah, thanks" "dident have that dream again, did you?" i smiled at him "no, i dident. thanks" cynder woke up, but zoe was still asleep on her. i looked down at her "want me to move hir?" she looked at zoe, comfertably asleep on her stomac "no, its ok" zoe opend hir eyes half way and looked at cynder "serg?" she smiled "no, cynder" shi smiled "oh" and stood up "sorry, i dident mean to fall asleep on you" cynder sat up "its ok" zoe walked over to me and huged me "hi" i nuzzeld hir a little "good morning" shi smiled at me "im so glad your not dead" i laughed "i am too" we dident waist time, we started walking. as we walked, i couldent help woundering.... what would my mother think if she saw me today?. spyro was right though, i should let it go.... i cant change it, shes dead. we were walking when i heard a nois "did ya'll hear that?" i stoped and looked at the three of them, cynder looked around "i hear somthing" spyro and zoe stoped and listened... spyro looked back and shouted "RUN!" and we all took flight. we were runing from a gient demon, he was 110 feet tall and had fire red eyes. i looked at spyro "we cant let this thing destroy theese villages. we have to stop it" cynder cut in "hes right... we have to fight it" i looked at zoe "take cover and we'll get you when we beat him" she noded and went and hid. the three of us went at it and the deamon let out a loud screach. spyro tryed to fry him with a fire attack but it dident hurt him. cynder tryed to attack him with a fear attack but it did nothing. before i had a chance to do anything, it grabed me and swollowed me hole. when i hit his stomac, i was scard. i got really pissed, id ben eaten. i could feel my rage take hold of me,i couldent stop it, i wasent in controll any more i took a breath, trying to take controll, but when i exhaled i let out a powerfull blast of dark energy, strieght up. the blast went strieght out of the monsters head and killed him instantly. breathing heavy, i went out through the monsters mouth. when i got to where cynder and spyro were, i was coverd in blood and spit, i colapsed, i was still conshious but i couldent stand up. thay rushed to my side and looked down at me. zoe poked out from behind a tree. shi ran over to me. spyro smiled "we thought he killed you..." and cynder cut in "you just saved us, we were loseing the fight." when zoe reached me, shi huged me, i was half conchious "i thought you were eaten..." i cought my breath and smiled "no one...eats...me" i tryed to stand up, i was a bit wabbaly. i went to the river to clean the blood off of my self. cynder followed me and stood next to the river. "what did you do in thare?" she scared me and i fell down "aaah!" i got out of the river and shook my self off. "so, what did you do?" i looked at her and smiled "honestly, i lost it." she smiled "still... we beat that thing, and your not dead" i sighed "your right, i still need to work on not loseing it so easy though" "you'll learn to controll it eventualy" "i guse so" we started to walk back to where zoe and spyro were. zoe was chasing spyro. me and cynder looked at each other and we both started laughing. zoe and spyro both stoped in front of us and zoe said "you two need to stop standing next to each ohter, i keep geting confused" i laughed "come hear zoe" she smiled and jumped on me. as we started walking again, we came to a clif, past the clif we could see a small moutian, we couldent see over it. in the vally, we could see a large village. "i have a feeling we should make our way over the mountians" spyro said "your probabaly right" cynder added "we might want to stop in that village first. we can get some food in us and rest tonight" zoe looked at her "maby...". we headed for the village when zoe asked "why dont we fly down?" and cynder walked next to hir "because, most people who see a dragon flying towards thare village dont assume its friendly" "oh, yea." we had reached the village and its resadents rushed for thair homes when thay saw us. sparx said "real nice nabourhood, such a warm welcome" zoe started to laugh. we went and saw the villages leader, a young, large and strong looking fox in a black and white camono. he welcomed us and led us into a room with a well crafted fire pit. we all sat close to each other across from the fox. "welcome to my village... have you traveld far?" he asked in a mysterious voice. spyro answerd "yes, we have traveld a long way." he laughed "well than, you must be hungry" he claped his hands and a small cat woman brought each of us food. as we ate the food, greatfully the fox rose and walked to get a better look at the four of us "such young dragons, are you traveling alone?" cynder, finished eating answerd "yes, but we can handel our selves. we watch each others backs" the rest of us finished eating and were happy. the fox spoke after a miniut "i require all of your assistance... my village is plauged by a pack of rabbid where-wolves, if you refuse to help me, i will have you imprissioned" we all looked at each other and spyro said "we'll help you..." i butted in "but you cant make zoe fight. id kill my self if anything happend to hir and it was my fault" the fox contommplated our offer "fine! but she stays with me untill you rid this village of the where-wolf mennis" i looked at zoe "ok" zoe walked over to the fox and he picked hir up and smiled. shi looked a little nervious. cynder looked at the fox, like she dident trust him i looked at spyro, we dident ether. cynder asked him "where do we find these where-wolves?" zoe was stairing at me and the fox was stairing at zoe. she broke his stair "oh, what? oh umm, yes. you have to wait untill night fall, thay will come again and try to feed on my villages resadents" iwe all stood up and i said ferm "than we will wait. just don't harm hir whial we do your dirty work" the fox started laughing "worry not my small friends, i will not harm your hatchling" i looked at spyro and cynder and rolled my eyes, cynder shook her head and spyro was holding back a laugh. "you may feel free to explore my village, or if you please, you may rest..." he claped his hands again and the cat that brought us the food opend a large door, it led to a large room with a big pile of pillows on the floor. we were tired and all made our way into the room. i climbed to a spot on the pile. cynder and spyro followed. i layed my head on cynder and cynder rested her head on spyro. it looked like we fell on each other. about 3 houers after sleeping, cynder woke me up bacause she was talking in her sleep. still laying on her stomac, i nuged her untill she woke up. i layed on her and staired at the celing "cynder,you ok?" i could feel her breathing heavy "yea.... it was just a bad dream. ill be ok" i couldent get back to sleep. after cynder went back to sleep, spyro woke up. cynder was still laying her head on him. he nudged me with his tail lightly and asked in a low voice "you awake?" trying not to wake cynder up, i said quiotly "yea i.... i cant sleep" he got it "shis fine, dont worrie" "yea, but i dont trust that guy..." "i get it, he was a messed up guy. we should get ready to fight" "yea but cynders comfertable, i dont want to get up" "yeah, and shes sleeping on me, i cant get up" "we'll just wait untill she wakes up" "yep..." after a whial cynder woke up. we all made our way to the streets of the village. the sun was setting. "you guys ready for this?" spyro asked us "as ready as im gona get" i answerd nervious, "im ready" cynder wasent nervious. the sun was down and the villagers ran for thair homes. the three of us walked close to each other. we heard a loud growl. cynder turned to her side "did you guys see that?" "what?" "i saw some figure runing" i took flight "come on, we'll be safer flying" thay followed me. we saw them. thay were hunting some tigeress and her baby. cynder darted out infront and said "come on, i'll lead" me and spyro looked at each other and followed cynder. we knocked them to the ground and started to beat on them. we hit them with all we had, it felt like thay would never stop comeing. thair leader took off into the forest. we chased him. when we cought him he tryed to swat at us. i shouted "we have to hit him all once, spyro, hit him with fire, ill hit him with dark energy and cynder, hit him with poision" we flew at him and attacked him. as we watched him fall, we landed and smiled "we did it." cynder sat up stright "now, lets go get zoe" we started back for the village. we got back to the home of the village leader, he was waiting in his fire pit room with zoe in his arms. "you have returned to me, i take it you'v defeated the army of the where-wolves?" spyro steped in front of us "yes, thayrer all dead" i steped up "now give me back my friend!" she tryed to get out of the foxes grip, but he wouldent let hir go he laughed in his throught "little dragon... as you can see, iv grown quite attached to this hatchling. im affraid shi wont be going anywhere" we huddld up, me and cynder had no ideas and looked at spyro "we cant let him get away with this, we'll have to fight him" i faced the fox who was peting the uneasy zoe "thats not gona fly buddy and..." "and what, you really think you can beat me? get over it, thairs nothing you can do" he put zoe in a cage and drew a soward. i looked at cynder, she was thinking. "wati! iv got an idea... spyro, strike his soward with a lightning bolt. when hes hit, me and serg will stab him through the head" spyro got ready "got it" he ran so the fox would follow him. me and cynder chased after the fox. when spyro stricked the fox'es soward, we stabbed him through the head. "now, how do we get zoe out of the cage?" cynder flew towards the cage "i got an idea" she hit it with the blade on her tail and zoe flew out. shi ran and huged all three of us "thank you! all of you! that guy was geting weard on me" we sat by the fire, spyro decided "we'll be safe hear to night, we need to rest. the trip over the mountians will be a hard one, even if we fly." he layed down, when he was asleep, zoe went to sleep on his stomac. me and cynder were awake and wached the fire, she could sence somthing was wrong. she sat next to me "whats wrong?" i looked at her "what? nothing, im fine" she looked in my eyes "i can see somthins is wrong, its in your eyes" "well... i fell like i could have, in some way, prevented zoe geting cought with that fox" "honestly, i feel the same way, but thares nothing we could have done" i layed on the ground and she came and layed her head on my stomac "your right" "yeah, and shi is safe now" i smiled at her "yea" we both started to fall asleep "hay cynder." she sleepaly said "yeah?" "...thanks" "no problem" and she fel asleep on my stomac. as the fire went out, i fell asleep too. tomorow, we would be tested, who knows what lied over those mountians. i woke up to cynder pushing on my stomac "serg, wake up" i cracked my eyes and looked at her, she was still laying on me and was smiling "good morning" i smiled back "hi" no one els was up. we stood up and walked out side, the sun wasent up yet. "thayel be up soon. lets go get some water" we walked to the river to get a drink. we dident say much as we walked back. when we got back she asked "you ready for this?" "i guse so, it's gona be a long trip over those mountians, you ready?" she smiled "yep" we went back inside. zoe and spyro were laying next to each other, talking about somthing, we all gatherd around the fire pit and spyro asked "are we all rested? ready?" zoe looked sleepy "yea" i sat up stright, fully awake "yep" cynder looked happy and ready to go at any time "shure am" spyro smiled and looked outside "than lets get a move on" we all headed to the door and started walking. zoe was asleep on cynders back, shi thought she was me. we found a trail and started up it. i kept looking back. spyro saw that i was doing it too "somthing wrong?" "humm?... oh, aaah, just watching for anyone who might be following us" "oh... ok, i dont think anyone will be stupid enough to follow us after what we did back thare" i smiled at him "ya know, your right." cynder looked at the two of us "iv got a bad feeling on what we're gona find on the other side of this mountian" me and spyro l;ooked at each other than back at cynder "your right, be prepared for somthin big" spyro added "yea and its gona be really cold close to the top of this mountian, thats gona suck". we walked untill night fall. we were close to the top of the mountian. cynder still had zoe on her back. shi was still asleep and the long hike was wearing us all out. "spyro, we should buld a camp, its geting late and we need to rest" "your right. i'll clear a spot, can you two go and get fire wood?" "yeah, but can you watch zoe?" "ok" i walked over to cynder "put zoe down with ought waking hir up, we'v got to go and colect some fire wood" she layed on the ground and rolled zoe off of her back. we headed into the forest for some fire wood. she looked at me "iv got an idea" she swung her tail at a med sized tree "help me chop this tree down" we both swung our tails at the tree untill it fell to the ground "how do we get it back?" i looked at her. she probabaly knew what to do "we get on top of it and try to fly it back" i smiled "good idea" we got ontop of the large tree and clamped on to it. we flaped our wings as hard as we could. it wouldent move. panting, i suggested "cynder, its too big, iv got an idea, lets cut it in half or so, we dont need all of this thing anyway." she was breathing heave too, she smiled at the idea "yes, lets do that." we went to a point to where the tree was about 20 feet long, and we started hacking at it with our tails. when it was cut we went to the middle of the tree and clamped on to it, we started flaping our wings and the log and us took off. i was laughing "hay cynder?" "yeah?" "were flying a log..." she started laughing too "yeah, i guse we are" when we got back to the camp, spyro had dug a fire pit and cleard the land. we started choping the log up and puting it into the pit. spyro lit the fire and we all sat around watching it. zoe was awake and siting close to me. we were telling stories to each other, geting to know each other more. we told stories of how we met each other and of how we grew up, it grew real quiot as i told mine "after my mother was killed, i saw my father get eaten, i was very small. i was scard, i was on my own for the next two years, untill i foung my grand mother. untill that same monster came back, my grandmother was a little bit smaller than the monster thay fought it out for 10 houers stright and, she unforutanatly lost. she was killed. iv ben out on my own now for aboud 50 years. sience i am a dragon. i know no family. zoe is the only friend i have left..." spyro looked up at me "well... youv got us" i smiled and cynder added "yeah" "thanks..." i changed thare, i had friends, we were like a family "i needed to hear that" we listened to the wolves howel. zoe wasent paying attention and freaked out. we all started laughing. it was a cool night. we huddeld up and went to sleep. the sun was already up when i woke up. zoe and cynder woke me up. "finaly, its harder to wake you up than spyro." "yea" i smiled at the both of them "sorry... where is spyro?" "hes geting a drink of water" i stood up and streached "its ok though, he just got up too" i took a deep breath of the fresh mountian air "well... are ya'll ready?" cynder smiled "yep" zoe jumped on my back "you are serg, right?" "yeah" "than, yep, im ready" spyro came back and looked ready to go. "hay serg, whats up?" "hay spyro. ready to go?" "yep" we started walking. it was geting colder, we were geting closer to the top. zoe started walking "so what do you think's over this thing?" i asked . spyro looked at me "thats a good question, i dont know. cynder?" "no clue" i looked at zoe "ddont look at me, i dont know ether". we were very close, the sun was starting to set and we ran for the top of the mountian. when we finaly reached the top, we all stoped and looked out into the vally. "wow, what a view" i said smiling. spyro took a deep breath "yea, its nice" cynder looked into the vally "do you guys see that? its a city..." we all looked down. spyro said "its the dragon city, ever heard of it serg?" i looked at him "iv heard stories, but thay wernt good ones" "thay arnt true, those ones about the ruthless, senceless killings?" "yea" "nope, thay arnt true" the sky was purple as we flwe down the side of the mountian, it was a site to see, we flew close to each other over water falls, trees, small mountian side villages and much more. as we landed in front of the gates of this large city we were all smiling, it was fun to fly that mountian. we enterd the city and spyro and cynder were welcomed, thay dident trust me, because thay dident know me. thay welcomed zoe, shi was very small and couldent do much. the elders brought us to thair palace. we all sat in a large circle. the oldest dragon pointed to me "you, pleasr rise..." i stood up "now please step forword" i walked toward him and stoped in the middle of the circle infront of him. "you are the one of great distruction, are you not?" i looked at him, feeling ashemed of my self somewhat "please answer..." i looked at him "...yes" "i see. and you now find your self hear? why have you come to this city?" i looked down he smiled "i will not judge you, yound dragon, please, explane." i took a deep breath and showed him the ring on my neck "i was told to go west... if i failed to fullfill this task, i would be shoked to death, iv tryed to remove this thing but i cant" he stood up and got a better look "i see, where west do you have to go?" "thats the thing, the guy that put this on me just said 'i'd know when i was thare' i dont know what he ment" he looked at spyro "and spyro, he travels with you?" spyro stood up "yes, sir." "and you trust him?" "yes." "i see. and you cynder?" she stood up "yes sir, i trust him too" "well than, if spyro and cynder trust you, i see no reason not to trust you also." than we heard a loud noise, a blast. we all rushed out side, up to the walls over looking the west of the vally. we couldent believe it, war meshiens and solders, griffins and evil dragons. the blast we heard was that from one of the war meshiens cannons. we watched the citys army rush out into battel. we stood and looked at each other. the mettal ring fell off of my neck. spyro looked at the ring on the ground and than up at me "your free" "yea, i am..." "you can go, if you want" "that depends, you two still my friends" he smiled at me "of corse we are" i smiled and looked at him and cynder "well i dont leave my friends" him and cyndes smiled at me. "than lets do this" spyro said, charged. i loked at him "but how?" cynder looked around at the sloders climing the wall. "we kill the ones climbing the walls, than we shoot the war meshiens with that thing" she said motioning to a large catapolt weapon. "lets go!" we attacked the solders with everything we had. we blasted them untill thay stoped comeing. than we ran to the catapolt. we tryed to turn it towards the main war meshien but it was stuck. cynder looked at it "lets ram it, it should turn it and we can shoot it" we all ran back and charged for the catapolt, when we hit it we heard a loud creek as it turned and we readyed it to fire. we had zoe ready to pull the leaver to shoot it as we loaded it. when we gave the signal, a loud crack rand out and it hit the war meshiean. spyro looked at me and cynder. "we need to hit it again" i yelled to zoe "be ready to fire again!" we reloaded as fast as we could. "zoe! now!" we heard another crack and a louder bang. i was smiling at spyro "one more shot you guys?" spyro smiled too "one more should do it" cynder was even smiling "lets do it!" we reloaded as the enamey cannon shot at the wall of the city "zoe! fire!" a therd shot went out and the war meshien crumbled. i looked at the two of them "lets go help kick some ass" thay both smiled and we flew down. one of the genarals was the guy who put the ring on my neck. i glared at him "you..." thay were loseing, "oh crap!" he started runing the four of us took off after him, we finaly cought him, we pined him in a cave "you..." "what do you want?!" the four of us scared him. he looked at me "you should be dead right now!" i took a step forward "why did you do that to me?" he sighed "i wanted revenge for my family you killed them" i looked at him when he took his hood off, i was shocked! he was the cub of the leader of the wolves that killed my mother. "YOU!" "yes, me" "your family killed my family and friends, than encased me in a chunk of amber..." "i dont care, i want my revenge!" he tryed to stab me with his soward, but spyro and cynder saw him and the three of us attacked him with breath attacks. he died instantly. i smiled at them "thank you. now i have my revenge" we started walking out of the cave and cynder said "its no problem, its like you said, were friends..." spyro cut in "...thats what friends do" we walked back to the dragon city, when we arived the war was over, our site had sufferd heavy losses but weed won. we enterd the city and were greeted as heros. we went to the river to relax, we sat huddeld together and watched the sun rise, like great friends do, ready for our next adventure.















Comments
Two, you need to use proper punctuation and capitalization.
Three, start each new paragraph on a new line, and indent the first line a bit. As well as dialogue.
But if you fix that, I might actually be inclined to read the rest.
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Don't bother with intelligence or emotional depth; neither of them have anything that'll ever benefit you.
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mess wit me! i dare ya!!!!! *evil laugh*
And don't hate on me for saying this, it will vastly imrove your stories, and over time, will actually make you be able to innertly spell words correct.
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Don't bother with intelligence or emotional depth; neither of them have anything that'll ever benefit you.
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mess wit me! i dare ya!!!!! *evil laugh*
From what I read, it wasn't bad, really. Interesting, to say the least.
The beginning part seems like there's too much dialogue, and the reader just kind of jump into the plot head first. Try developing the setting a bit more, before pushing the reader forward through the plotline.
And, try to be more descriptive about things. Indead of just telling us (the reader) what happens, try and paint an image in our minds that tells us what's happening. Thesauruses are nice as well, but don't overuse them.
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Don't bother with intelligence or emotional depth; neither of them have anything that'll ever benefit you.
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mess wit me! i dare ya!!!!! *evil laugh*
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Don't bother with intelligence or emotional depth; neither of them have anything that'll ever benefit you.
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mess wit me! i dare ya!!!!! *evil laugh*
~Old~ Spyro: Not bad, looks like my new self is turning out ok! Two claws up!
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Me: So who's taking me out to night?
Blurr, Sludge, Fireflight, Silverbolt, Blaster and Prowl, Swoop: *stares at one another*
Me: Tell me, before I kick your cans across the galexy!!
Blurr, Sludge, Fireflight, Silverbolt, Blaster and Prowl, Swoop: Me!
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